Both of your Deibhidhe poems were good, Alti! You did some nice work with the alliteration and fairly well with rhyming the couplets. Next time, watch where you put the stress in each line. Also remember the importance of the circular form in bardic poetry. It's always a nice touch to close your poem by somehow linking the first and last lines, no matter how many verses it has. You can do this by rhyming the first and last words, making the last word same as the first, or simply repeating the entire first line at the end.

Here's one I scribbled out this morning, not exactly a perfect example but I hope it will illustrate the features of Deibhidhe. Read it aloud and listen for the rhythm, rhyme and accents. See how it fits with the pattern below it, A(a) and B(b) signifying the two rhymes and the capital letters, including X(x), standing for the accented syllables.

Fey the flower, green the bed,
Love's lavender sweet scented
Down lazy lanes, passion at play
We wend our way to Mayday.

x x x x x x A
x x x x x X a
x b x x x x B
x x x b x X b

The poem closes by sealing the circle, so to speak, with the rhyme of the last word "day" and the first word "fey."

Hope this helps. I've been enjoying all the poetry you've posted so far. Keep going, you're doing just fine!